Cathy Eats Her Words

October 29, 2007

The dogs

Filed under: Character, NaNoWriMo — jeanne @ 8:31 am

The dogs are significant in that they recur all the time thruout the story, and their behavior changes, mirroring the changes in the other characters, and responding to events.

Tabasco is a large mongrel, part Chow and part German Shepherd. He was gotten at the pound years before the story opens, and he’s the only dog when the story starts. He eats the cheap dog food, and scrounges for anything edible on the street, whether it’s rotten and crawling with ants, or a dessicated chicken bone. He lunges on his leash, and if it weren’t metal he would grab it while he walked, and chew it to pieces. Husband uses a choke chain on him, and often they talk about getting a spiked collar, and sharpening the spikes. He’s very headstrong. He likes to sniff every bush, wall, and tire when he walks, so he’s always having to be pulled away from something, or tugging husband down the street. This comes in handy when they’re going uphill. When he poops, he stares at husband waiting for approval. He leaves huge stinking piles of shit, and often stops two or three times to get all his business done. He’s the watchdog in the house, and barks incessantly at the mail lady or any homeless guy who walks by, and of course any dogs. He’d love to be able to play with passing dogs, and barks with desperation when they pass. In the beginning of the story, he growls at the boyfriend, and because Cathy and husband stay in bed very late most mornings, he starts leaving poop in the front room, so husband puts him in his basement room at night, and this solves the problem.

Scootie is a King Charles Spaniel puppy that Cathy’s friend gave her because she couldn’t take care of it. She’s a dog that loves to sleep all day, in your lap, and Cathy thinks it’s right for her because she wants a quiet, peaceful life. The dog arrives right after Star moves back in with her father, and there is trouble with her peeing on the floor, so the dog walk goes from twice a day to six times, while the little dog adjusts. On her walks, Scootie likes to chase anything that moves, like blowing leaves and squirrels. She has a retractable leash. When the leash is dropped, she gets frightened because it retracts toward her neck, and then she finds herself carrying around a handle half the size she is. When she poops she waddles around, usually toward something she wants to sniff, multitasking. She will bark whenever the other dogs bark, and usually without knowing why. She will keep barking after the other dogs stop. Scootie sleeps in the bed with Cathy and husband, and can neither jump onto the bed or off of it, so she is trapped there for the night, which pleases Cathy because it means she won’t pee on the floor. She is intensely loyal to Cathy, and barks and growls whenever Star comes into the room when they’re in bed. This would be adequate warning for them that their sex is about to be interrupted, except that Scootie keeps wanting to play as well, and they have to keep pushing her away and turning their backs to her. She likes to lick.

Stumbles is a Maltese dog, and belongs to Star. The first time she lives with Cathy and husband, the dog stays with her father, who isn’t willing to let Star have her in case she trades her for drugs. The ex never walks the dogs, so his own dog as well as Stumbles have the habit of peeing in the house. All the carpeting is ruined, and the place smells like old pee. The ex traumatizes Stumbles whenever he catches her at it, so she’s now in the habit of eating her shit as it comes out. When Star moves in the second time, Stumbles comes with her, and immediately starts peeing on carpets, so Cathy and husband roll them all up and put them in the attic. Star then complains about the hardwood floors. Stumbles takes as long as Scootie did to house train, and Cathy has to go around picking up and mopping the frequent messes. Stumbles has an old leash Cathy and husband found on the sidewalk one day; it’s been half-chewn thru by Tabasco. Cathy ties them both together so she can hold them in one hand. When she has to take all three dogs out, she’s constantly switching leashes from hand to hand, trying not to let them bcome braided. Stumbles likes to stay in the middle of the street when she walks, and has chronic constipation. Whenever Cathy drops the leash, Stumbles acts like she did something wrong, and sits down, hopefully wagging her tail, sometimes turning on her back in submission. Stumbles barks whenever she hears a noise. She likes to sit on the chair next to the window and bark at everyone who goes by. She has an irritating, high pitched yap, and her barking is never a sign of trouble, tho Tabasco’s usually is. It’s often necessary to go and pick Stumbles up and bring her into another room to stop her barking. Both Scootie and Stumbles eat expensive dog food. Tabasco constantly sneaks over and eats their food. Scootie and Stumbles are jealous of each other, and will fight each other’s attempts to eat their food, but all they do is growl when Tabasco horns in.

The dogs get along, and play with each other. Stumbles tries to hump Tabasco all the time, tho Tabasco is the boy (ex-boy). It’s a dominance thing. Tabasco gets her by the back of the neck and drools on her, so that her fine white fur is matted and yellow from the saliva. Scootie mostly hides in the corner and watches them playing, but she swarms all over Tabasco when he emerges from the basement in the morning, licking his face. He totally ignores her, touches noses with Stumbles, and looks for things to pee on. He teaches the smaller dogs how to smell everything, how to drag on their leashes, and how to pull. It’s funny to watch 2 dogs weighing less than 10 lbs each struggling against the leash.

October 25, 2007

Expanded Chapter Structure

Filed under: NaNoWriMo, plot — jeanne @ 11:42 am

A older couple deserve peace and quiet, but disaster strikes when three generations of women hole up in one house, running from the law.

1. Moving in – Short period of time, maybe a month

  • Cathy and husband, blissfully alone in their house
    • description of scene
  • Meet the ex, surprising them after sex
    • angry conversation w/ex in kitchen
    • proper adult behavior, star’s recent activities – dui
  • Star moves in
    • things star can’t stand (heat, light, scavenging, food), adjustments everybody has to make (airflow, doors, TV, phone ringing at night, laundry, bathroom stuff, smelly things)
    • spread out
  • Cathy rearranges the spare room
    • recabling the office, making new arrangements for sewing area
  • A garbled version to Cathy’s mom
    • trying to keep Mom ignorant of everything that’s going on
    • different version to lawyer friend
  • The boyfriend comes to dinner – bounty hunter
    • guns on the bed, stories of apprehension, swagger
  • Star continues being rebellious teenager
    • won’t get a job, won’t feed herself, won’t clean, won’t eat in the kitchen
    • driving on suspended license – caught speeding
  • Meet the drug friends
    • Greanne, a pregnant used-too-be meth dealer, and Saphyr, a witch who also states she is pregnant, but doesn’t get any larger
  • Cathy and husband unhappy
    • too much change, too large a burden, no time to be alone with each other, too expensive, court, no sex
    • dog hunt

2. Moving out – One or two months

  • Ex helps move
    • star has had enough restrictions, and wants to be free, so she’s going back to live with dad
    • dad’s parting shots – i told you so
  • Drug friends visit
    • they’re saying upsetting things about star, hinting she’s been stealing from them, driving
  • Cathy rearranges the room
    • recabling, moving heavy furniture, taking down drapes, opening windows
  • Cathy and husband blissful again
    • sex in unusual ways
    • cathy gets a dog
  • Garbled version to Mom
    • star wasn’t happy because we don’t like air conditioning
    • different version to lawyer friend
  • Star moves in with boyfriend
    • unexpectedly. ex has little to say, doesn’t care
  • Cathy visits Star at boyfriend’s
    • too much opulence, the mess of lots of roommates, no food. lies
  • Ex relays drug friends’ tales
    • cathy worries about star, is unhappy whenever she thinks about her

3. Jail – Maybe a month and a half

  • Breakin at boyfriend’s, jail
    • drug deal gone bad, cleaning out boyfriend’s house, meet the parents
  • Ex’s reaction
    • wash his hands, again. leave her in jail
  • Jail visit
    • prison uniform, cold, not sleeping, contrite and promising. court
  • Boyfriend’s parents
    • leave him in jail, bail out next day, ban contact with star, whose fault it is
  • Garbled version to Mom
    • she’s fine, i don’t hear from her often
    • different version to lawyer friend
  • Star bailed out by boyfriend
    • he loves her, he’ll fix it, they’ll stay together
  • Star goes to rehab
    • dad hires a fancy lawyer, takes her advice to get her admitted
  • Star learns she’s pregnant
    • blood test done twice, mentioning it casually to cathy, reaction
  • Ex upset
    • he washes his hands of her again, advises abortion and bars her from contact with boyfriend
  • Rehab visit w/husband and boyfriend
    • 12-step meeting, parents in denial, cathy’s confession, boyfriend says all the right things, marriage plans
  • Garbled version to Mom
    • she’s pregnant and not getting an abortion, praise the lord. are they getting married?

4. Moving in, again – Several weeks to a month

  • Star, reformed
    • glad to be out, looking in the eye, straight talking, discussing the past
    • her dog
  • Cathy cautious
    • no more money, no more waiting on star hand and foot
  • Rearrange room
    • recabling, hanging curtains, tv, dad buys her a window air conditioner
  • Boyfriend sneaks visit
    • parents won’t let them see each other, cathy enables
  • Star gets a job, pays fines
    • cathy drives her – suspended license
  • Visit to OB, hospital
    • not like cathy’s experience
  • Star learns to cook
    • allrecipes.com vs cathy’s food sensitivities
  • Mom wants to visit
    • garbled version, sure, come on down, but mom gets sick
    • different version to lawyer friend
  • Ex disapproves
    • of everything, complains about money, boyfriend, pregnancy

5. Hiding – Four or five months

  • Star skips a court date
    • has heard court will take baby, fueled by greane’s experience
  • Star wants to hide to protect baby
    • husband is against it, cathy gets irrational about it, fight w/dogs
    • what laywer friend has to say
  • Cathy rearranges two rooms – renovation, robbery as excuses
    • star moves into the attic – anne frank
  • Cathy brushes up on her midwife skills
    • hours on the internet, chat groups, old textbooks, gathering instruments
  • Boyfriend comes looking for Star
    • bounty hunter looking to protect his investment. honeyed words, suspicious eyes
    • star’s dog
  • Mom’s visit is blown off
    • ready to come, no too busy right now, come later nearer birth time
    • Garbled version to Mom – she’s fine, learning to cook, sleeping alot
  • Using pregnant drug friend’s medical ID
    • shenanigans to hide star from greane, sneak star out of house
    • greane tells boyfriend
  • Ex has nothing good to say
    • abortion, bad genes, money, his own job and future at risk because of star
  • Boyfriend stakes out house
    • only gradually do they notice his truck across the street, reactions of cathy and husband
    • husband makes arrangements to observe boyfriend’s activities around their house
  • Cathy and husband sneak off and have sex

6. Waiting – Four or five months

  • Star very pregnant
    • tv, chocolate pudding, sleeping, up all night. phone calls
  • Cathy waits on Star
    • food, interruptions, walking in on them in bed, nursery item list, dog
    • shopping for clothes and nursery items, all wrong
    • lawyer friend
  • Drug friend has her baby
    • blood test, custody, involuntary admission
  • Mom arrives
    • unannounced, pick me up from the airport. too much luggage – i prayed
    • sees how things are – doesn’t understand or condone hiding, they keep the details from her
  • Mom gets sick
    • flax seed creates constipation creates diverticulitis
  • Mom takes over
    • tv, temperature, blinds, phone, slip-ups all over
  • Cathy and husband hide
    • downstairs in husband’s sanctum. sex at last except for interruptions
    • husband says something bad, cathy thinks he hates her
    • another fight, dog walk, wish to get away from family stress
    • 7. Birth – About a week

    • Birth
      • mom objects, threatens
      • not like cathy’s experience
    • A lull, ex, drug friends
      • they think everything will be all right
      • dog
      • lawyer friend
    • Husband takes ill
      • hospital, heart, noises, sleep, nurses, temperature, sex
      • cathy goes home to walk the dogs
    • Mom and Star go shopping while Cathy’s not there
      • leave openly in the car despite all cathy’s warnings, when they are out
    • Boyfriend observes
      • prowls around, plants devices
    • Boyfriend threatens Cathy
      • cathy stands up to him
    • Husband gets out of the hospital, weak
      • notices boyfriend, takes steps to protect family
    • Boyfriend sets up Cathy
      • in the midst of threats, a plant on her porch
      • doesn’t care about baby
    • Cathy and Mom arrested
      • mom because she causes a ruckus, boyfriend across the street
    • Boyfriend apprehends Star
      • amid promises of love and devotion, dragging her to the car
      • star hands baby to husband as she goes to answer the door
    • Husband watches the baby
      • weak, has to put baby in carriage and go for formula
      • dog walking
      • rekindling knowledge put aside decades ago – how to feed and change, burp
      • dog hunt
    • Star, Mom and Cathy in jail
      • passing messages
      • mom in infirmary

    8. Resolution – A couple of weeks

    • Lawyer visits Cathy, Star
      • new information about boyfriend, activities, phone calls
      • prosecutor wants to make example of star
    • Lawyer investigates boyfriend
      • informer – her client being set up by him
      • still selling drugs
    • Boyfriend visits Star in jail – marriage?
      • not sure about the baby, maybe he has a plan to get rid of it?
    • Drug friends something, ex something
      • don’t know yet
    • Star’s charges dismissed
      • because of boyfriend’s deal w/cops
    • Cathy bailed out, Mom sent home
      • dog
      • evidence that drugs were planted by boyfriend
      • tapes and photos
    • Star moves out
      • Cathy rearranges room
      • Star moves back in
      • Boyfriend comes to get her – that’s my baby
    • Boyfriend confronted by Star, lawyer, Cathy
      • know what he’s up to, reports to cops and informees, parents
      • boyfriend gives up and goes somewhere else
      • or, house arrest = parents, then mercenary army
    • Star decides to stay
      • cathy rearranges room to accomodate star and nursery
    • What happens to ex, drug friends, Mom
      • mom’s officially a hypochondriac, others end up worse off
    • Cathy and husband blissful
      • sex is still furtive, but they keep the futon open in husband’s sanctum
      • dogs

    October 24, 2007

    Character notes

    Filed under: Character, NaNoWriMo — jeanne @ 2:14 pm

    Star doesn’t like fish. So Cathy and Husband have to wait until she’s gone somewhere, and then have to keep the doors and windows open and use air fresheners. Star comes thru the room holding her nose and making a big nasty face. Further in her pregnancy, she expands this dislike to I’m getting sick.

    Star keeps the TV on all the time, either some reality show or mtv .  She keeps it on all night, and sometimes Cathy has to come in and shut it off after she’s asleep. Sometimes she leaves on scary movies, or it’s the loop of a dvd menu.

    Star wants it cold in the summer and hot in the winter. All winter she has the doors sut and the drapes drawn, and the oil filled radiator going both barrels. In the summer she gets a window air conditioner and runs it full blast all the time. The temperature difference between the rest of the house, and the outdoors, is  enough to give someone a stroke.

    Mom brings a whole suitcase of special foods and home remedies, over the counter drugs, prescription drugs. She looks like the bag lady of pharmaceuticals. The first day there she goes on about the health benefits of flax seed, drinking a nasty-looking concoction of flax seed and orange juice she says will do her good. The next day she’s all gummed up with constipation because of the flax seed making glue in her guts. The day after she has husband run to the drugstore for stool softeners. The day after that she has him run out for dulcolax, something stronger. The day after tha tshe goes in with a finger and hooks out the sheep pellet-sized constipated shit. The day after that she has diarrhea. By this time she’s running a fever, so she stays in bed all day, watching the TV very loud on either the Xian channel or Fox News. After a week of this, she announces she’s figured out she has diverticulitis, and on the orders of a doctor several years ago, the only thing to do is go completely to bed for three days. So she eats a handful of nuts and other diverticulitis-inflammatory items, and lazes around some more, the idea of going back home having flown out the window. It’s at this point when Cathy and husband start to hide from her.

    How does Mom cope with Star’s trying to hide from her bounty-hunter boyfriend? She’s dismissive of the danger. Nobody’s going to capture you and throw you in jail. Nobody’s going to take your baby. There’s no need to keep away from windows (she throws open all the blinds at every opportunity). Answer the phone, will you, Star? Oh, you want to speak to Star – yes, she’s right here. Come on, let’s go to the mall – I want to buy you some baby things.

    Cathy spends her days tending her garden and writing a food blog. She’s being an activist, following her old hippie ideals. She’s concerned about pesticides, food additives, factory farming, and the food industry takeover of the FDA. She’s an early disciple of Adele Davis and Jethro Kloss. She reads food labels and is suspicious of any ingredient that she doesn’t have on her own pantry shelves. She makes dinner from scratch every night, and never goes out to eat. She thinks that all the world’s problems can be cured by the proper diet.

    Cathy and husband keep sneaking off to have sex. Since they’re old, a ‘quickie’ can take several hours, but they arrange to meet out in the garden and crawl in under the camper top of he truck that’s been laying out in the back yard for months. They go up into the attic looking for things, and Star hears strange bumps. After Star moves into the attic, they hide in her old closet. When Mom comes to stay, they move downstairs to the futon in husband’s tinkering room and try to have sex every night, falling asleep in the middle, and try again when they wake up in teh morning, only to be intererupted by the dog wanting to go pee, or Mom banging on the ceiling for someone to come up and show her how to turn on the coffee pot, or to fetch her the sugar because she’s out of the fake stuff again.

    The dogs. Husband’s dog is a mutt, and when they go to the pet store for food, the Eukanuba guy tries to argue them into $50 dog food. He asks what kind of dog they have, and husband says a mongrel, and the guy wants to know what breedd that is? they end up going to the supermaket for the $7 bag of 40 lbs of food. Star’s dog is a Maltese, a hairy little mop of a dog who humps the mutt all day, and comes away with a soaking head, as the mutt sticks her whole head into his maw. The little dog barks at every noise, but they only pay attention when the mutt barks because he’s got better judgment. The little dog likes to shit on thecouch where usband likes to sit and read his book. Cathy has to come around and check when he comes upstairs to take a rest. She also has to clean out the cat litter box three times a day because the little dog likes cat poop – with crunchy bits.  The little dog came from Star’s dad’s place untrained. While there she would go off and pee on the rug in the spare room. When she comes to Cathy’s house, Star refuses to take her out to pee (she doesn’t need to pee), and so Cathy starts a regimen, and with time the little dog becomes housetrained. The little dog eats expensive little dog food, but she wants to eat the mutt’s food, which is full of artificial flavors and colors. The mutt, of course, lives to eat the expensive food, and they both are quite sneaky about it. The people don’t usually notice until they’ve almost finished each other’s dishes.

    October 22, 2007

    Words Cathy has to eat

    Filed under: Character, NaNoWriMo — jeanne @ 4:33 pm

    The medical system sucks

    The food industry sucks

    I’m glad I’m thru raising children

    All I want is peace and quiet

    I wish my daughter would grow up and go off and have her own life

    My ex is more pitiful than toxic

    Boyfriend is a nice boy, I suppose. Star loves him, so he can’t be all that bad

    I wouldn’t mind if Mom came to live with  us

    Chapter Structure

    Filed under: NaNoWriMo, plot — jeanne @ 3:43 pm

    1. Moving in – Short period of time, maybe a month

    • Cathy and husband, blissfully alone in their house
    • Meet the ex, surprising them after sex
    • Star moves in
    • Cathy rearranges the spare room
    • A garbled version to Cathy’s mom
    • The boyfriend comes to dinner – bounty hunter
    • Star continues being rebellious teenager
    • Meet the drug friends
    • Cathy and husband unhappy

    2. Moving out – One or two months

    • Ex helps move
    • Drug friends visit – pregnant, witch
    • Cathy rearranges the room
    • Cathy and husband blissful again
    • Garbled version to Mom
    • Star moves in with boyfriend
    • Ex relays drug friends’ tales

    3. Jail – Maybe a month and a half

    • Breakin at boyfriend’s, jail
    • Ex’s reaction
    • Jail visit
    • Boyfriend’s parents
    • Garbled version to Mom
    • Star bailed out by boyriend
    • Star goes to rehab
    • Star learns she’s pregnant
    • Ex upset
    • Rehab visit w/husband and boyfriend
    • Garbled version to Mom

    4. Moving in, again – Several weeks to a month

    • Star, reformed
    • Cathy cautious
    • Rearrange room
    • Boyfriend sneaks visit
    • Star gets a job, pays fines
    • Visit to OB, hospital
    • Star learns to cook
    • Mom wants to visit
    • Ex disapproves

    5. Hiding – Four or five months

    • Star skips a court date
    • Star wants to hide to protect baby
    • Cathy rearranges two rooms – renovation, robbery as excuses
    • Cathy brushes up on her midwife skills
    • Boyfriend comes looking for Star
    • Mom’s visit is blown off
    • Using pregnant drug friend’s medical ID
    • Garbled version to Mom
    • Ex has nothing good to say
    • Boyfriend stakes out house

    6. Waiting – Four or five months

    • Star very pregnant
    • Cathy waits on Star
    • Drug friend has her baby
    • Mom arrives
    • Mom gets sick
    • Mom takes over
    • Cathy and husband hide
    • Mom and Star go shopping
    • Boyfriend observes
    • Boyfriend threatens Cathy

    7. Birth – About a week

    • Birth
    • A lull, ex, drug friends
    • Boyfriend sets up Cathy
    • Cathy and Mom arrested
    • Boyfriend apprehends Star
    • Husband watches the baby
    • Star, Mom and Cathy in jail

    8. Resolution – A couple of weeks

    • Lawyer visits Cathy, Star
    • Lawyer investigates boyfriend
    • Boyfriend visits Star in jail – marriage?
    • Drug friends something, ex something
    • Star’s charges dismissed
    • Cathy bailed out, Mom sent home
    • Boyfriend confronted by Star, lawyer, Cathy
    • Star decides to stay
    • What happens to ex, drug friends, Mom
    • Cathy and husband blissful

    October 20, 2007

    Chapter structure coming up

    Filed under: NaNoWriMo, plot — jeanne @ 4:27 pm

    I have promised myself that I will have the chapter structure completed before November 1, when NaNoWriMo starts. I figure, based on my earlier unpublished novels, that it will be easy to go with the writing flow if I have a good idea where I’m actually headed.

    It’s going to take a pad of paper for me to do this. I’ve got a few character trajectories that I need to work out before charting the chapters. I need to know where one character will interact with another and where the plot parts occur before I can commit myself to writing it down. So I’ll be using a cloud diagram to figure it all out. This is simply everything that is going to happen, all spread out on a sheet of paper, with lines connecting each to the other.

    From there, I’ll be able to take the same information and plot it linearly, this happens followed by that happening. This will turn into chapters, and then I’ll be able to go thru the story and write headings that I can then expand into chapters. Headings like in old Henry Fielding novels, where you get a synopsis of the chapter right up front. Like this:

    Chapter iii -- An odd accident which befel Mr Allworthy at his return
    home. The decent behaviour of Mrs Deborah Wilkins, with some proper
    animadversions on bastards.

    However, until I actually get that done, you won’t see any chapter structure from me. Perhaps I can scan in the splat diagram; it might be fun if I can get a large enough resolution.

    On second thought, you wouldn’t be able to read my handwriting.

    October 14, 2007

    Scenes we’d like to see

    Filed under: NaNoWriMo, plot — jeanne @ 2:29 pm

    Opening scene – Cathy and husband in bed after hot sex, surprised by Dad and Star.

    Follow-on – Cathy in the kitchen with Dad, on the defensive about the indiscretion, being told she has to take Star back.

    Star making a scene about having to do things in Cathy’s house, being rebellious and immature. A mother daughter fight.

    Star’s friends visit, sweetness and light.

    Star goes back to Dad after being told to get a job, and shortly after moves in with boyfriend, at which point Dad disowns her. Cathy and husband have sex.

    Star and boyfriend and the drug deal gone wrong. They end up in jail.

    Cathy visits Star in jail. She’s pitiful.

    Star asks to go to rehab, on the advice of her lawyer. Dad reluctantly agrees to pay the necessary.

    Cathy visits Star in rehab. a 12-step meeting. She tells her mom that she’s pregnant, and she’s afraid they’ll take the baby if she has to go to jail.

    Star moves in with Cathy and husband. She’s different, nicer, quieter, telling the truth. Her drug friends visit; they’re a little sketchy.

    Sex with Cathy and husband while Star is living in the house.

    Star misses a court date and boyfriend, the bail bondsman and bounty hunter, shows up at the door wanting to know where she is so he can take her in, so he won’t lose the bail. Cathy stonewalls, and realizes that precautions have to be taken. They make a room for her in a hidden part of the house.

    Dinner at Cathy’s house: drawn shades, a new recipe, Star doesn’t answer the phone and doesn’t walk her dog.

    Dog walks with Cathy and husband. (This scene is repeated again and again as the story proceeds)

    Dealing with Star’s pregancy. Cathy reads up on midwifery, figures out how to get necessary medical care while not tipping off any authorities.

    Cathy negotiates with pregnant Green (drug friend) for her medicaid card so Star can get lab tests. Cathy is suspicious that she will tell.

    Boyfriend starts hanging out near the house, waiting for Star to show herself. He sends messages thru Green that he loves her, and that everything will be fine if she’ll give herself up. But Cathy doesn’t believe his assurances. Drug friends begin to tell stories about Star, boyriend begins to be abusive.

    Star gets very pregnant, sleeps all day, eats like she’s starving, learns to cook, acts like the perfect daughter. Cathy can’t sleep at night for all the fears of what can go wrong, both with the birth and with boyfriend and the drug friends, and Star’s legal situation.

    There are more shennanigans with the medical authorities. Green acts suspiciously and tells more horrible stories about Star. Star’s Dad comes by to talk about it, and they have a conversation that Star can hear. Star’s boyfriend comes to the door and threatens.

    The birth. In labor, everyone comes to the door to interrupt the process. Cathy is frantic with things to do and to worry about. It takes forever, but Star finally has her baby.

    more to come

    Plot twist

    Filed under: Character, NaNoWriMo, plot — jeanne @ 2:02 pm

    Okay. I was watching my kid’s copy of Accepted, where a bunch of kids create a college to fool their parents, and a bunch of students show up. Like ‘what if they had a war and nobody came?’

    So I thought, what if something totally incongruous happened to my story line? But hey, it’s a simple girl comes home to have a baby story. The only unusual thing is that Star goes from being the teenager from hell to being nice, sweet, thoughtful, considerate and loving. And that’s not really uproariously funny like I’m looking for. I want something akin to a madcap farce, not a bittersweet coming of age love story between mother and daughter.

    So I thought about it. And husband helped, of course. He’s really good at brainstorming. What if Star has to remain hidden and they have to do the entire pregnancy and birth by themselves?

    Star finds out she’s pregnant after she gets out on bail, when she checks into rehab. When she gets out, she runs to her mother for help. ‘If I have to go to jail, they’ll take my baby and I’ll never get him back.’ It might be true, and it might not, but Cathy reacts by deciding to do whatever it might take to keep Star out of jail.

    So they do an Anne Frank with Star, hiding her in a secret room. She misses a court date, and they issue a bench warrant. Her boyfriend (who is a bounty hunter and threw her bail) finds out she’s missing, and looks for her in the most obvious place, her mom’s house. Cathy denies she’s there, and from then on they do skull and dagger whenever Star has to leave. Cathy uses her experience as a birth attendant (scanty), and studies up on midwifery so she can attend her daughter.

    Star’s got some drug friends, women who are psychotic when they’re not on their meds. They all used to hang out together and do drugs – Star, boyfriend, the rest of the crew. One of them, Green, is pregnant, and Saphire is a witch. Star uses Green’s medicaid card and goes to an any lab test facility to get her blood work done. This is problematic, as the lab will not release the results to the patient, and Green’s doctors see that there are significant differences in her results. Cathy gets a muddled report of the results from Green, who gets several significant things wrong.

    As the pregnancy goes on, it gets more complicated to hide Star. Her boyfriend is still coming around looking for her, her drug friends are unreliable and so Cathy has to hide Star from them as well. The drug friends get nuts and cause trouble for Star, telling her dad and her boyfriend and her mom all sorts of horrible things that they don’t know whether to believe or not. Husband is the voice of reason; everybody else is running around crazed. Cathy visits a local birth center, where she is awed by the technology. She goes home and attempts to create a bargain-basement hospital room, but it looks like a miser’s torture chamber.

    The birth happens, at home, with interruptions by Dad, boyfriend and friends. It all goes well, and Star has a baby girl, and experiences no complications. Cathy breathes a sigh of relief. Star moves into the nursery, and the boyfriend sees her when she sits on the porch to sun the baby, who has a touch of jaundice.

    The boyfriend has gone back to his double-dipping, catching miscreants by night and selling drugs by day. He’s also a police informant as a compromise to get the charges against him dropped. He shows up at Cathy’s front door, demanding Star or else. Cathy stonewalls, and the boyfriend promises to get even.

    The cops show up at Cathy’s door with a search warrant. Star hides with the baby, but the cops find drugs on her front porch, and she is arrested. While she’s out, the boyfriend takes Star back to jail. Husband is left with the baby. The boyfriend doesn’t care that it’s his kid at this point, he just wants his bail money back. He tells her everything will be okay, but all she can think of is DFCS taking the baby.

    Cathy gets out on bail, and goes to see Star, who is sitting in the county lockup awaiting a hearing. The boyfriend visits Star in jail and swears he loves her but had to bring her in because of the business. His dad would have his ass if he didn’t. He says they can go away and start a new life once she’s thru the legal thing. But he shows little concern for the baby because he believes the drug friends’ assertions that Star was whoring for drugs. He wants to run a DNA test on the baby. Star says she’ll think about it.Star believes his promises. Cathy doesn’t. She remembers the boyfriend’s threats.

    Star’s lawyer petitions for the charges against Star to be dropped because the boyfriend’s charges were dropped. The district attorney is a hardass, and presses for prosecution. But the lawyer is a smart and scrappy young woman. They tap Cathy’s phone and record conversations between boyfriend and Star that reveal who he’s informing on. One of the criminals is a client of the lawyer. The others she is sure she can locate.

    Boyfriend shows up at the door and continues to threaten Cathy, this time with a setup that will guarantee she goes to jail and loses the house. Both Star and the lawyer are in the house listening. Star comes out to confront the boyfriend and protect her mom. He threatens to get her baby taken away. She gets furious and tells him to leave. He blusters, not afraid of three women. But these women have taped evidence as well as direct contact to the people boyfriend have been setting up, and while boyfriend blusters, Star hands the tape to the mail lady for the cops, and the lawyer calls up the criminal on her speed-dial and tells him that boyfriend is an informant. She suggests that he move his bail bond activties to another state.

    Star stays with Cathy and Husband and sends the boyfriend packing, finally seeing him for the scumbag he is. She’s depressed and lonely only until a hot guy follows her home. And they all live happily ever after.

    October 12, 2007

    A dream

    Filed under: Dream — jeanne @ 12:37 pm

    I’m going with a friend up to the mountains of Virginia/West Virginia, something like 20 miles northwest of Abingdon. There’s a map. It’s called Rock-something. I’m moving up there with all my stuff, moving into a trailer on a property with other trailers, around a nice lake in a hollow.

    Someone doesn’t like me, some guy I might have met early in the dream, but I forget now. He’s sent his cronies out to get me, to do me harm. A woman calls on the phone, she wants my address. I give her my address in Atlanta, but don’t tell her the city or zip, just the street address. Then I get suspicious, and want to know why she wants to know, but she hangs up.

    Then the cars arrive with the people who are out to get me. They are old nasty cars full of mountain people, dressed in rags, with grizzled faces and missing teeth. The woman who called me is in the second car. They get out, their intent obvious, and making no secret about the fact that this guy who hates me wants me out of the area. I try to talk to them, getting absolutely nowhere with the men, and find one of the women compatible, sympathetic to my pleas, but determined to do what she was sent for. I appeal to her sympathy, pointing to my chest, telling her I’m here because I’ve got breast cancer and wanting her to leave me alone because I’ve got enough to deal with. She goes ahead down the hill to my trailer to join the others.

    I can see down the hill to where my trailer is. It’s a beautiful location, with fall trees surrounding the lake. They’ve taken the roof off and I can see all my stuf inside, covered with leaves as if it’s been there uncovered for a full season. I am very sad, and very anxious, and I want to do something to stop them. I go down the hill, stopping people and telling them I’ve got cancer and they should leave me alone. I am in tears, sobbing as I speak. Nobody moves to stop them. A group of the men walk past me up the hill, carrying one of the last items I moved to the trailer. It seems to be a market umbrella or something like that, carried in a sling. I’m not sure what it is, but I know it’s mine, and they’re not saving it but stealing it.

    I get down almost to the trailer. I’m afraid they will try to harm me, even tho their stated intention is to set my trailer on fire. Nobody tries to stop them, and I’m crying and upset and just want them to leave me alone. They set the fire, and the leaves flare up, spreading in my direction. I turn to run, and am chased by the fire, which sets my clothes on fire. I put out the fire on myself and continue to run away, eventually running on my hands and feet. I descend around a hillside, and come out at a rest stop of some sort, where there are people siting aound.

    I tell people my pitiful story, crying as I speak. One woman is sympathetic. I get on the phone to call the sherrif to come make them stop. The answering service says it’s going to take awhile, if ever, before the sherrif comes out. evidently there is no real sherriff for this jurisdiction, and he’s got to come from somewhere else, or organize a posse of locals, or something. I’m not sure which little community I’m actually in, or where my trailer is. I hang up, certain that I’ll get no help there.

    Then I’m running thru the woods again, but I’m naked now. I come across a group of hikers camped out in the woods. One guy sees my nakedness, I cover my chest with my hands. He gets me some clothes, and the group of them proceed to fit me out with hiking clothes, including hiking socks dipped in hot wax to protect my feet. I put everything on, until I’m bundled up. They’re discussing how the snow is lessening but still heavy, and it becomes obvious that they’re not going with me, but sending me out to do it myself. One of the guys has a baby in a cargo pocket of his pants. I can see its little bald head sticking up. He keeps feeding it tidbits. They discuss whether I should take the baby up the hill with me, but we decide I’ve got enough to handle already. (Which is what I tried to tell the people who were fixing to torch my trailer.)

    Alone, I journey off to climb up over the mountain to where the hollow with my now burned trailer is. I don’t think I’ll be in time to stop them, so I’m going to retrieve whatever is left. I reach another wayside stop with people sitting around. A woman I spoke to at the first stop recognizes me, remembers my story, and says she’s on my side and hoping for the best. I’m still emotional, but I’ve stopped crying about how hard my life is. I’ve somehow gone from being fearful and whiny to feeling self sufficient, calm, and forgiving of the people who’ve wrecked my things (what are things, anyway?). I am very conscious of the shift in my feelings. I put some coins into the payphone and try to call my parents. They don’ts answer, but I get my daughter, and we talk about the situation. I am very glad to be in touch with her. I go back to the woman and ask her to try and call them for me, later. I put their phone number on the back of a paper napkin, and a note saying I love them, that I’ve been trying to reach them, and that I would like them to come and get me. I repeat how I love them. I notice that my handwriting is very loose and sloppy, and so I read the note to the woman. I’m pretty sure she’ll contact them; the only problem is that I still don’t know precisely where I am, and so can’t tell anyone how to reach me.

    After a short while awake, I go back into the dream, or something like it. I have now moved into another place in the woods, more like a large cave than a structure. There are vines everywhere, and I set about pulling up the vines and making it neater. The vines go for hundreds of yards, and I follow, pulling them out of the ground. Finally they all come up, and I pull the ends in, making a huge pile of ex-vines that I shove over the side of a cliff.

    One of the guys who gave me the clothes is there, visiting. I go inside to change clothes, and pick some of the things they gave me, putting them on and modelling them in front of the mirror. One of the things I try on is a lacy black peignoir, with a pair of white panties that bulge out and make me look like a guy, even tho I poke at it to make sure it’s only my fat. I really like the look of my costume, even tho I am very conflicted about wearing it in front of the guy, because I’m really happily married to my guy, who is somehow there with me, and don’t want to get the guy interested. I go out and we interact, and I do things around the place, and find that I’m wearing normal sweatshirts and pants instead of the slinky thing I had on. I am relieved.

    October 10, 2007

    More about characters

    Filed under: Character, NaNoWriMo — jeanne @ 10:38 am

    Here’s something borrowed from how to write a novel, the snowflake method

    • The character’s name

    • A one-sentence summary of the character’s storyline

    • The character’s motivation (what does he/she want abstractly?)

    • The character’s goal (what does he/she want concretely?)

    • The character’s conflict (what prevents him/her from reaching this goal?)

    • The character’s epiphany (what will he/she learn, how will he/she change?

    • A one-paragraph summary of the character’s storyline

    Take a day or two and write up a one-page description of each major character and a half-page description of the other important characters. These “character synopses” should tell the story from the point of view of each character. As always, feel free to cycle back to the earlier steps and make revisions as you learn cool stuff about your characters. I usually enjoy this step the most and lately, I have been putting the resulting “character synopses” into my proposals instead of a plot-based synopsis. Editors love character synopses, because editors love character-based fiction.

    Take another week and expand your character descriptions into full-fledged character charts detailing everything there is to know about each character. The standard stuff such as birthdate, description, history, motivation, goal, etc. Most importantly, how will this character change by the end of the novel? This is an expansion of your work in step (3), and it will teach you a lot about your characters. You will probably go back and revise steps (1-6) as your characters become “real” to you and begin making petulant demands on the story. This is good — great fiction is character-driven. Take as much time as you need to do this, because you’re just saving time downstream. When you have finished this process, (and it may take a full month of solid effort to get here), you are ready to write a proposal and sell this novel. Do so.

    Make a spreadsheet detailing the scenes that emerge from your four-page plot outline. Make just one line for each scene. In one column, list the POV character. In another (wide) column, tell what happens. If you want to get fancy, add more columns that tell you how many pages you expect to write for the scene. A spreadsheet is ideal, because you can see the whole storyline at a glance, and it’s easy to move scenes around to reorder things.

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